tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post430079700975433767..comments2024-03-29T09:30:44.859+00:00Comments on MOODY WRITING: Don't Overstuff Your Verbs: Unpackmooderinohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01523337588830695638noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-79708908151807931552014-08-03T16:31:47.551+01:002014-08-03T16:31:47.551+01:00@Lexa - focusing on minutia like facial expression...@Lexa - focusing on minutia like facial expressions tends to be another way of telling, you have to focus on what's happening and let the emotions come out of that.<br /><br />@Gina - thanks.mooderinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01523337588830695638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-12222119104531548452014-08-01T23:30:55.540+01:002014-08-01T23:30:55.540+01:00This is such a great post! I like how informative ...This is such a great post! I like how informative this is.<br /><br />www.modernworld4.blogspot.comGina Gaohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09032273127593718883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-76378715364259039572014-08-01T05:22:29.082+01:002014-08-01T05:22:29.082+01:00I had to really think about this post, since I fin...I had to really think about this post, since I find most descriptions of eyes, heartbeat, or hands, etc. can be as cliche as the verbs that are used too often in certain situations. Thanks for making me ponder new things!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07735576044552810103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-59157145782240531642014-07-31T00:32:01.229+01:002014-07-31T00:32:01.229+01:00@Diane - there is a skill to finding the exact rig...@Diane - there is a skill to finding the exact right adverb that says it perfectly, but you don't see it very often.<br /><br />@Denise - I don't believe all adverbs are bad, but they can be poorly used and often are.<br /><br />@Murees - happy to help.mooderinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01523337588830695638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-71489370656092964072014-07-30T18:26:03.012+01:002014-07-30T18:26:03.012+01:00This is something I am guilty of. Your post was ve...This is something I am guilty of. Your post was very informative and made me see the error of my ways. Thank you. Murees Dupèhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11781339206465690961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-53888015011053215612014-07-30T04:10:51.068+01:002014-07-30T04:10:51.068+01:00Strong verbs can remove a reader from the story, w...Strong verbs can remove a reader from the story, when they're just too jolting, unusual, don't quite fit. This is a tricky one. I agree you don't need adverbs when you're already saying someone is running, but there are different degrees of running, too, that might need to be qualified. I notice most best-selling authors don't mind using an adverb or two or twenty-three...<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-38779179867720513952014-07-29T14:11:41.090+01:002014-07-29T14:11:41.090+01:00Great post!
Some adverbs are subjective and an au...Great post!<br /><br />Some adverbs are subjective and an author might assume that it is clear what is being conveyed when it isn't very clear at all. For example:<br /><br />He whispered loudly.<br /><br />The adverb "loudly" is subjective. One person might consider it loud and another not so much. A person might be whispering in a hospital waiting room like so...<br /><br />John leaned in toward Sally and whispered, "Do you have anymore mints? The garlic from lunch is sticking with me."<br /><br />The old lady sitting across from John directs a comment to her husband, "You wouldn't know by the smell of his breath."<br /><br />The husband responds, "Huh? What dear?"<br /><br />Poor example, but you see how an adverb could be viewed differently dependent upon who is witness to it. I'd rather these things be shown instead. It's much more work, but a better reader experience I think.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15901684621715980573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-58223405231121506582014-07-28T20:10:15.726+01:002014-07-28T20:10:15.726+01:00@Lilith - it's very satisfying finding an orig...@Lilith - it's very satisfying finding an original way of saying a familiar action.<br /><br />@Alex - it is harder but it also helps you see the scene happen in your head.mooderinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01523337588830695638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-17804511662123081052014-07-28T18:11:08.920+01:002014-07-28T18:11:08.920+01:00That is harder than it sounds. But it's a lot ...That is harder than it sounds. But it's a lot like showing rather than telling.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1061937348591302555.post-64828382225197023472014-07-28T18:02:51.267+01:002014-07-28T18:02:51.267+01:00I see what you are saying. This is harder then it ...I see what you are saying. This is harder then it sounds. I am sure with a lot of practice extra verbs can be taken out of writings. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10304701332216772385noreply@blogger.com