It’s not enough to have something dramatic happen in a story. The
reason why it happens is also important.
In terms of impact on a reader, there’s a big difference between a
character getting upset about losing their house to the bank and getting upset
because their favourite tv show got cancelled.
What happens keeps the reader interested in the short term. Why it
happens is what keeps them interested over the course of an entire novel.
For the big things, the major plot points, the premise, the reasons
why it’s happening will be something the writer is probably already aware of
and working on to make sure its importance is clear.
The guy doesn’t want the girl to leave because he loves her, the
secret agent wants to find the bomb before it kills everyone, the cop wants to
catch the serial killer because yada yada.
Obviously, being aware you need a reason is only part of it. You still
have to come up with decent ideas and execute them well, but as long as you
know where to make those reasons clear and interesting, you’ll have as good a
chance of making it work as is possible.
However, the big moments aren’t the only moments in a story.
Characters have to go about doing stuff, getting to places, interacting with
each other. Those scenes also require characters to have reasons for doing what
they’re doing.
Since those moments aren’t of such great consequence, it can be easy
to let them slide. Make them as short and quick as possible and get them out of
the way. You need a guy to go to the store because once he gets there he finds
the place overrun with Martians and the story gets going. So he tells his wife
he’s going to get some milk and off he goes.
And that’s perfectly plausible. It won’t have readers throwing the
book down in disgust, they’ll keep reading, probably, as long as things don’t
get too pedestrian. But not turning them off isn’t really where you want to aim
for. The question is, will it keep them engrossed and turning the pages?
Because flat, generic, emotionally bland scenes don’t tend to hold the
attention. And just because we haven’t got to the bit with the aliens yet,
doesn’t mean it’s okay to coast.
If, for example, the wife wants him to get five things from the store
and tells him to write them down so he won’t forget, and he gets pissed off
because she has no faith in him and he refuses to write a list but she texts
him the list, so he takes a photo of a dog taking a dump in the street and
sends it to her... well, maybe you don’t have to go quite that far. My point is
you can create tension and emotion and reveal character and have a dynamic
already in place using the smallest of scenes.
That way, when he does get to the Martians in the 7-11, he’s not going
to arrive like he’s idling in neutral, and the reader isn’t still waiting for
the story to start.
In real life, people do things for the same reasons as everyone else.
If I say I’m eating a sandwich you won’t require an explanation, you’ll just
assume I’m hungry and eating is what you do when you’re hungry. As a writer,
though, there is room in the seemingly ordinary to stimulate the reader’s interest.
If a man says he’s going to the bank, there’s no reason why the bank
scene can’t be interesting and engaging.
If man says he’s going to the tanning salon, there’s no reason why
that won’t be an entertaining scene.
But if a man says he’s going to the bank, but he drives past the bank
and pulls up outside a tanning salon, you’ve already got the reader’s interest
before the scene has started.
You can get away with giving characters the usual, familiar reasons for doing things, but the potential for the unexpected or unfamiliar to engage a reader often goes unexploited.
If you look at any moment in a story and the reason why the person is
doing what they’re doing, and then just ask yourself if the reason could be
something more interesting, or if the character’s mood could be better shown, chances
are you’ll be able to engage the reader and start building momentum so that
you’re already up and running by the time you get to the take off point.
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21 comments:
I did like it....I was hoping for more too! So your content was pulling me in further!
Texting a photo of a dog taking a dump - well, that certainly adds to the story!
It's those little moments where we need to show character nature and development.
@Karen - Somebody likes me!
@Alex - Of course some people are into that sort of thing. Hello internet!
I really wish I was on twitter so I could retweet everything you post!
As always, super helpful and insightful
@CBame13-Not on twitter? What do you do with all that free time?
Never miss an opportunity to entertain. Love it! The part about the husband photographing the dog taking a dump made me laugh out loud.
@CS - hopefully the wife felt the same way.
Um, I'm not on Twitter either. What free time?
As usual, your post has me heading back to my WIP to see how I can make it better. (Is it okay if I skip the dog taking a dump?)
@LD - Permission granted.
"What happens keeps the reader interested in the short term. Why it happens is what keeps them interested over the course of an entire novel."
Hi Mooderino, at this stage of plotting my books (Trilogy) its the whats and whys I am worrying over. Great post!
I'm struggling with the grocery list thing in real life. I tend to show up at home without everything whether I have a list or not, which, I would argue, proves I don't need a list. I can screw things up without a piece of paper to document how severe my screw up was.
And I'm all over the place in my fiction... sometimes making a soap opera so thick I can't remember what the plot was. That's what I get for trying to give reasons for my characters actions.
great advice!
give the reader some foreplay...
have a wonderful weekend!
@Rachna - too many whats, not enough whys, that's my problem.
@Rusty - I'm a bit of a savant when it coming back without the one thing I went out for in the first place. God given talent.
@Tara - Cheers.
Someone gave me writing advice yesterday. They said, "People don't want to read about worlds that are worse off than the real world is."
I responded back, "Thanks for the advice. I guess Suzanne Collins is out of luck then."
@Michael - that's weird advice, I would say if anything the opposite was true.
I make grocery lists all the time. Then I forget them at home. o_0 Anyway, I find that adding humor keeps me turning the pages even during the domestic type scenes, or dogs taking a crap, that works too. (;
Excellent advice. I've been trying to get this across to a member of my critique group. Every character needs a goal in every scene. If they don't, then you need to cut the scene. Just because it's "realistic" doesn't mean it works in a story. Reality is overrated. :-)
Character motivation. Yeah, as simple as it seems, I think it really is the key that makes all the difference.
Sarah Allen
(From Sarah With Joy)
@Elise - humour is one of those things I'll forgive a lot for.
@Anne - Down with reality!
@Sarah - it also makes it a lot easier to get the momentum rolling.
Good stuff here, Moody. Love the examples--though the dog taking a dump . . . yeah. No. ;)
"As a writer, though, there is room in the seemingly ordinary to stimulate the reader’s interest."
Love this. So simple yet, for some, not so obvious or you wouldn't need to be pointing it out.
@Donna - cheers, although I'm not above pointing out the obvious.