Dialogue is one of the most
important parts of a story. Readers will skim through everything else, but
rarely will they skip over dialogue. It’s engaging, it’s fun, it brings a story
to life. Plays, movies, radio are all constructed around speech.
Turning functional dialogue into
something more, something that rivets and entertains, is difficult. It would be
great if we could just listen to people talking and naturally condense it into
sparkling dialogue—and some people do have that facility—but for most of us it
takes a bit more effort.
The following three areas are key
to good dialogue. You can ignore them all and still write engaging dialogue, but it’s a lot easier if you keep them in mind.
1. Saying exactly what you mean
is boring.
2. People agreeing makes for
terrible conversation.
3. What you say is more important
than how you say it.
1. Saying exactly what you
mean is boring
As the writer you know what a
character is trying to say. You know how they feel, you know what their
concerns are, so the obvious thing would seem to be to just have them say it.
While you might easily grasp that telling someone you love them can be a
difficult thing to spit out, it may not be so obvious why you lose if someone
says, “Can I borrow your car?” if he wants to borrow the car.
And the truth is you don’t lose
anything. But you don’t gain anything either. The whole point of dramatic
fiction is to build. Whether that’s tensions or suspense or emotion or curiosity
or whatever. What you don’t want is a very long wall that’s only one brick
high, you want to put the bricks on top of each other, and you can do that
quicker by giving characters less simplistic dialogue.
— Can I borrow your car?
— Why the hell would I let you anywhere near my car?
The first line is set up. It
doesn’t get interesting until the second line. As opposed to:
— Hey, your car’s looking dirty. Want me to take it to the car wash?
And already the suspiciously
helpful offer is raising questions.
The problem is that not saying
what you mean can feel counter-intuitive. And if you do try to make things less
straightforward you can end up just making things vague or confusing.
2. People agreeing makes for
terrible conversation
Conversations come alive when the
people talking hold different viewpoints and are able to express themselves.
Two people on the same side turns into a monologue, which can still be entertaining,
but it’s much harder work.
An uneven pairing is also dull.
This happens a lot with political views where one person has all the best lines
and makes a lot of sense, and the other is a moron. Fun to write, not much fun
to read (unless you completely share the author’s beliefs).
One person telling another facts
and info, getting the occasional prompt to continue (“Uh-huh, and then what
happens?”) demonstrates a lack of skill and technique. It’s important to get certain
information to the reader. Regurgitating it in dry text-book fashion isn’t necessarily
the best way to do it.
The three types of conversations
I’ve just outlined as not very interesting can totally be used to good effect
if you’re a skilful dialoguist. But a lot of that relies on you being able to
judge what makes a good topic for conversation.
— I just got Mike to propose marriage and I made him think it was his idea.
— How did you do that?
versus
— I just got a job at the cardboard box factory.
— How do they make cardboard boxes?
But if you have the characters on
different sides of the conversation, you immediately raise the level of
interest, both for the characters and the readers.
3. What you say is more
important than how you say it
The secret to good dialogue is
simple. You want to be able to evoke whatever emotion, tone, mood, attitude
through what people say.
Just by reading the dialogue, you
should be able to tell who’s thinking what.
You could just state it in the
narration.
“Can I talk to you?” asked James, his usual pushy self.
“Okay, come in,” said Sally, obviously not happy to see him.
Or you could dress it up a bit by
adding description to the scene. Instead of telling the reader Sally wasn’t
happy, you could show it through her actions and facial expressions. But all
that would still be poor writing.
“Can I talk to you?” said James. “Just ten minutes, I swear.”
“You’ve got two.” Sally looked at her watch. “Starting now.”
The key isn’t in how someone
speaks, it’s in what they say. This is quite a tricky thing to learn. The
obvious way to put emotion into speech is to use language the way we hear it.
“Mr Smith, where were you the night of the fifth?”
“The fifth? Oh, er, let me think. The fifth ... the fifth... hmm.”
And so on. The problem with that
kind of writing, apart from it being bloated and very easy to get carried away
while convincing yourself your writing is ‘real’, is that it’s tedious
to read (imagine the guy above stalling for a full page). It’s not that bad to
hear, in a movie or play, where an actor is selling it to you in the guise of
characterisation, but on the page it’s deathly dull and longwinded.
Trying to figure out what someone
could say that would both make it clear to the reader what tone you’re going
for while still being subtle and interesting is difficult.
“Mr Smith, where were you the night of the fifth?”
“I didn’t kill no one.”
“Who said anything about—“
“You can’t come in without a warrant. I know my rights.”
That’s not say you can’t add
physical actions, facial expressions or speech patterns to make the scene more
vivid, but a conversation is only going to have real impact on a reader if what’s
being talked about has more relevance than general chit-chat or banter.
The best way to develop an ear
for this sort of dialogue, I’ve found, is to read screenplays. Specifically,
screenplays to movies you haven’t seen so you aren’t swayed by the actors’
interpretation. Obviously you want to read the scripts of good movies, but it’s
relatively easy to find that out. It doesn’t really matter about the genre or
even the age of the script. You aren’t reading to find out how people speak,
you’re reading to find out how you convey emotion through dialogue.
When you read an exchange between
two people and you feel something—sadness or fear or whatever—look closely at
how the conversation started, how it built, and at what point it transcended
information and became emotion.
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25 comments:
In real life it is how you say it, but not so on the written page. Probably why I got so much out of Blake's Save The Cat screenwriting book.
Dialogue is still something I work to improve.
@Alex-true, but we take in so much data when we speak to someone it would be impossible to get all that on the page.
Your tips are very simple but make all the difference, thank you!
When I saw the photo from His Girl Friday, I was hoping you had a vid clip. I loved the dialogue in that film. Thanks for an interesting post.
Also, you want to avoid talking heads and grounding the characters who are speaking by having them perform actions. You might also want to include ways to break long forms of dialogue into multiple paragraphs by including an open quote at the beginning but no close quote until the very end.
@jnana-thanks!
@LD-One of my favourite movies.
@Michael-good advice, cheers.
Great thoughts on dialogue! Thanks!
@Julie-YVW.
Do you have any recommendations on where to read scripts of good movies you haven't seen? I don't have a clue where to begin, but this sounds like an excellent idea. I have listened and analyzed dialogue in several movies and learned a lot, but I can see the point with reading it instead of listening/watching it.
@Margo-there are a number of online sites that have just about every screenplay ever written (for free). www.script-o-rama.com is a good one, also www.joblo.com/moviescripts.php, but there are plenty more if you google.
As always, a master class on technique. Thanks!
@Rusty-cheers.
I loove this post. Definitely helps to keep dialogue in mind. WHen you're writing for kids, or teens, especially--you have to be aware of dialogue. you have to make sure you sound like a teen if your protagonist is one, for example :)
Nutschell
www.thewritingnut.com
@nutschell-dialogue is often the best place for humour too.
Great advice! Watching movies for lessons in great dialogue is one of my favorite activities :)
Sarah Allen
(From Sarah, With Joy)
@Sarah-harder to work it out when watching than when reading, fewer distractions.
Dialogue was my greatest weakness when I started writing fiction. I set out to learn as much as I could and I have improved a lot (with always more to learn), now I have a new greatest weakness :)
Excellent point and fantastic examples.
@Charmaine-thank you very much.
This was something I struggled with a lot at the beginning of my novel. I started eavesdropping on people at restaurants (yeah, super creepy) and then saying the dialogue in my writing out loud. Television shows also helped. Love your blog! New here :)
@Saumya-cheers, glad to have you here!
Love this! As an editor, I find someone has a gift for writing dialogue or they don't. It's so important, too, for dialogue not to sound like prose. There's a different rhythm to it. Dialogue is such a great tool to advance story and define characters, if well-written and used appropriately. But poorly written or "clunky" dialogue really slows things down.
I'm a new follower, and I'm sharing this one.
@Tia-thanks and welcome. I already follow you over at Depression Cookies, so great to have you here.
I've read a few of your post, and your advice sounds reasonable enough. However, I fear that I could over think a scene. Do you feel like these tips are best used if you think the scene lacks suspense/conflict/interest?
There are so many useful tips in this post, I've decided I need to bookmark it for future reference. I particularly like the idea of reading screenplays.
@Katerina-yes, story shoud be organic on the whole and tinkering should be targeted and intentional, but personally I prefer to do my analysis beforehand (it helps that I enjoy things like reading scripts) so that it becomes ingrained and so that I have a pretty clear idea of what I think dialogie should sound like from the outset.
@Cally-plays are also good for this, plus they don't have as many car chases.