All stories get more complicated the further you
get into them.
This isn’t a bad thing, it’s just inevitable. The
reader starts off knowing nothing, and over the course of the story they get
fed more and more information.
If it’s a properly written story anything the
reader is told will be relevant to further developments. That means they have
to remember everything that’s happened so far and how it relates to everything
else that’s also happened and everything that’s going to happen.
This network of events, consequences and reactions
will get ever more intricate. To the point where it can become so overwhelming that
when a character says, “Hey, Mary’s back!” all the reader thinks is, Who the hell is Mary?
In some cases confusion is down to too much
information at. Sometimes it’s due to convoluted writing that’s difficult to
follow.
These are technical problems that can be easily
fixed (once you become aware of them).
But stories are always going to get complicated as
you refer back to things or reveal the implications of actions or create
conflict. This isn’t something to be avoided, but it is something you have to
be aware of and communicate in a way the reader is able to process.
You can’t rely on the reader just being super
focused on the story and having a great memory (although that would be very
helpful). You have to help them navigate the parts where things get messy.
Firstly, key players should be memorable. Putting
in a reminder is okay, but can feel clunky.
“Hey, Mary’s back from Jamaica. I hope she
remembered to go see Old Bessie like you asked her to.”
Better to have the name automatically trigger
meaning for the reader. One way to do this is to make the name itself
memorable. Change Mary to Maxuma and it becomes much harder to forget. However,
a story where everyone has ‘interesting’ names not only undermines this, it has
the reverse effect of making it much harder to remember who anyone is.
Unusual or surprising details help to make
information stick. If Mary is the girl with the tail and cloven feet it won’t
take much to jog the reader’s memory. Although, again, this only works if your story
isn’t set in a world full of people with weird appendages. And it can become
quite laborious to give every single character some remarkable characteristic.
While these sorts of things will help, there is a
much stronger way to keep the reader aware of all the stuff going on in the
story, and that’s to interlink it.
If I tell you Mary is tall, went to school in
Scotland and hates jellyfish, this may give you an idea of who she is, but it
won’t necessarily keep her in mind when she’s absent.
However, if I tell you Mary’s taller than most men,
which means she has difficulty getting a boyfriend and that’s why she’s
available to be sent on a dangerous mission since she’s the only one in the
group who’s single, then the linking of who she is and what she does helps the
reader to place her that much quicker.
The same works for other elements of the story. When
you reveal information, the level of detail and accuracy isn’t going to be the
things that stick in the mind, it’s how those things relate to the development
of the story.
If the character robs a bank in Chapter 2, and it’s
mentioned when he’s arrested and interviewed in Chapter 32, the reader might
not be able to recall many of the details.
But if the bank robbery in Chapter 2 was to raise the money to finance
an even bigger crime that led to the character being arrested and interviewed,
then the reader will be able to remember that much easier.
If you keep events separate (it wouldn’t be
surprising for a criminal to commit unrelated bank robberies, it’s his job
after all) then you make it harder for the brain to retain the information. If
you link them it creates a cascade that’s continuously flowing.
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23 comments:
Linkage - check!
Most writers do this fairly well, but too many characters and too much detail really cause confusion.
I've had a few of those "Who the Hell is Mary?" moments in both my reading and my writing. :) Really good post, Mood.
I think having too many characters can be a huge factor in causing confusion. If you have more people in your story, then more things will be happening and it could get hard to keep track of who's doing what.
I'm in the process of tying the knots. I'm confident I'll be able to do it right. At least confidence is there, haha.
@Alex - there's a real art to keeping all those balls in the air.
@Madeline - cheers.
@Sarah - it's certainly gets tougher the more variables you add.
@Al Diaz - confidence is a good place to start.
This is an issue I'm dealing with right now. As I'm wrapping up my edits, I've realized that I have too much going on. Too many sub-plots. I've decided to take out one of my sub-plots and save it for book two. I think it'll tighten up the plot and keep things in focus. Or, maybe I'm just making a jolly mess out of everything. I think it's a toss up at this point.
@Elise - i think every story gets to a point where nothing seems to make sense (mine always do)
When I read, there's usually always one person that gets mentioned and I have no idea who they are, or something they do is referred too and I flip back to try to refresh my memory.
@Patricia - that happens to me a lot too. Not a deal breaker (I'll keep reading) but it does pull you out of the story.
The situation Patricia described annoys me a lot. Not really good writing if that's necessary.
@Misha - it's surprisingly common, I find. And then there are very character-heavy books where you never forget who people are.
Another great post to keep in mind during writing. Thanks Moody!
great post! I do hate stories with random unrelated events that don't seem to make sense--even until the end.
Nutschell
www.thewritingnut.com
I have a problem with continuity sometimes. I recently edited a manuscript that I had sitting around for a year and was like whoah...continuity error alert!
Super post, Moody. I am trying to concentrate on linkage in my current WIP. Sometimes its easy to forget about continuity in our hurry to get the story down.
@lydia - thanks!
@nutschell - me too.
@Mike - it tends to make sense at the time because of all the extra info we hold in our head, but we've forgotten it all by the time you go back to it.
@Rachna - being so familiar with the characters makes it easy to leave stuff out on the page.
Great post! Exactly right, complication has to have balance. Good reminder.
Sarah Allen
(From Sarah, With Joy)
I always worry I'm repeating myself with too many reminders. Good editors help me with that.
This is such a problem. It's so hard to tread the line between mentioning something too often or not enough in order for the readers to remember it. It's especially hard if you have a CP group that reviews a chapter a week. People can't remember what they read several months ago; then you end up repeating yourself to remind them of what went before.
Great post! :-)
@sarah - always helps to know what's going on.
@susan - overexplaining is the other side of the coin.
@Lexa - that's when creating a flow to the story helps. If the story itself reminds you who people are you don't need to add it.
I just finished a thriller/mystery and when the culprit was revealed, I couldn't remember who they were. So not too long a list of suspects please! I muddle easy :)
@Charmaine - ooh, that's not good.