It is tempting, especially at the
beginning of a story, to have things happen in a way that is convenient, just
to get the ball rolling. A new guy starts at work and our heroine likes the
look of him. Later that evening she’s in the supermarket doing a little
shopping and who should be buying olives at the deli counter but that guy from
work...
Obviously that scenario is
perfectly plausible. We run into friends or work colleagues all the time. You
can be visiting a foreign city, walk round a corner and bump into someone you
went to school with and haven’t seen in years.
But the temptation for a writer
to lend a hand, to put their character in the right place at the right time,
makes it harder to get to know the character. You are in fact delaying the
start of the story.
You might think, well, the
character still has to deal with the scene. Just because she happens to meets
him in the supermarket doesn’t mean a sparkling encounter can’t ensue. And this
is perfectly true. But story isn’t there to tell us what people do, it’s to
tell us who they are. It just so happens that the only way to find out who they
are is through what they do.
My point being every time your
character goes somewhere or does something, that’s a reflection of their
personality. It’s not about what happens when a girl meets a boy, it’s about
what happens when this girl meets this boy.
If they do things for no
particular reason or on a whim, that’s okay, life is certainly full of those
moments, but you need to be aware that in fiction those are dead moments.
There’s no tension, just slack. It isn’t until the character takes control of
their own actions that the reader will become properly engaged with the
character and the story.
There are going to be times when
those slack moments are unavoidable, and that’s okay, they won’t ruin an
otherwise great story, but they’re never going to be the good part of the story
so it’s best to keep them to a minimum.
In the case of our girl in the
supermarket, let’s say she likes the look of the new guy in the office so she
goes to her friend in Human Resources, gets his address, finds the nearest
supermarket, waits in her car until she sees him go in and then pretends she
shops there too.
Now, you may say, but that’s not
the type of character I want to write about, my heroine isn’t a crazy stalker,
which is fine. The aim is for her behaviour to reflect her personality. If she
isn’t acting in a way that does that, change her behaviour until it does
reflect who she is.
So, better to have the MC drive
the story rather than the story drive the MC. But, what if you can’t think of a
better way to get the characters together? Or what if you don’t want to? There
are plenty of good stories where events are kicked off by a coincidence,
perhaps your story is of that kind.
In that case there is a simple
technique to keep the focus on your MC, and that’s to give them something else
to do that is driven by them. Even if you can’t think of something better than
the coincidental meeting at the grocery store, why is she at the store? How can
that reflect her character? Yes, she could have run out of eggs and milk and is
just doing a quick shop, but maybe her ex-boyfriend is in town and has
convinced her to make him dinner. Again, if your character isn’t a doormat this
scenario may not suit your story, but then you need to come up with a scenario
that does.
By giving her something to do
that does show us who she is you get the story up and running even if it isn’t
part of the main plot. The meeting with the new guy still happens but the
throughline is centred on our girl and her reasons for being in the store, not
the coincidence.
One other thing to remember is
that a coincidence that makes life more difficult for the MC is far more useful
than one that makes life easier. If she bumps into the guy and flirts and has a
lovely time, it’s going to feel contrived and Mary Sue-ish. If she gets into a
fight over the last jar of olives, you’ll be giving yourself much more material
to play with.
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25 comments:
The main character drives the story - well put!
Novels are built on forced coincidences. Take the start of "Great Expectations" where Pip is in the graveyard and happens to come upon a convict, a convict who happens to get wealthy and help Pip out later in life. That's why novels are not factual reproductions of real life.
"...better to have the MC drive the story rather than the story drive the MC."
Thank you. I needed this today. :)
@alex-thanks.
@PT-meeting someone you don't know already isn't a coincidence. The fact the convict goes on to be his benefactor is also not a coincidence since it is a deliberate act on his part based on that first meeting. If an event is caused by someone's deliberate action it isn't a coincidence.
@Linda-glad to be of help.
Very true.
Nancy
Thanks, very useful!
@Nancy-or at least true-ish.
@jnana-glad to be of use.
I like the term Mary-Sue-ish. I need to write a story that has a protag with that name. It'd be funnny.
I love this post. Good stuff - coincidence for coincidence's sake is always a good way to turn off a reader. When I come across such conveniences, I get bored fast.
Good information. I thought at first that you were talking about helping your characters out of trouble too easily. A blog post there as well.
Don't remember who said it, but "Put your characters up a tree and throw rocks at them." I like the alligators extension of that. Then they have to figure out how to get out of the trouble I got them in. :)
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@Michael-I imagine Mary Sooish is a very attractive girl.
@Jay-I think you can make coincidence work in a story, but if major events rely on it chances are it's not a good story.
@Lauren-the problem is there's part of us that would like the universe to just help out in real life, so the temptation to do it for our characters is quite big.
This is so well stated. I love character driven stories.
@Ciara-my feeling is every story is character driven to some extent (or they should be).
Great points. Thanks!
Great post! Makes me think of my novel, where the big kickstart event is a chance encounter on the road with a coal transport going north for the sorcerer-dictator. However, the reason my MC is on the road THAT day says something about her.
Lots to think about from what you said. Thanks for the inspiration!
Excellent post. I like your point that a coincidence, if I need to have one, should make things harder for my MC, not easier.
@julie-cheers.
@crimson-no wonder fuel prices are so high, what with the sorceror-dictator taking all our coal.
@LD-sn easy wsy to take the focus off the coincidence and put it on the consequence.
Found my way here via Janice Hardy. Great post. I'm going to take some time and think over if I'm giving my MC a helping hand that could be done in a more interesting way. Thanks!
@Dee-great to have you here. Any friend of Janice...
Moody, as usual you make me think of something I hadn't considered before in my writing, but it makes TOTAL SENSE. Thanks!!
Moody, as usual your post makes me think and think. Sometimes I tend to use co-incidence and serendipity.
Very true, and I like making things more difficult, gives the mc a challenge and me one as well when I write.
@Lorena-thank you.
@rachna-i don't think there's anything wrong with using serendipity, most stories have it to some eextent, it's how much you rely on it that you have to be careful about, I think.
@Pat-yes, makes it more fun all round.
All stories should be character driven and nothing they do should be too easy.
Thought-provoking post. Thank you!
@Ellie - cheers.